Writing Challenge: Unliked

“His skin felt strangely invigorated, like he had been vigorously scrubbed all over, then spent an hour in a sauna, and finally plunged into a freezing cold pool.”

“All he could see was her eyes looking into his like a pair of deep tropical lagoons aching for his soul to dive into them once again and swim deep in the clear warm water.”

“As his senses adjusted he detected a source of illumination like moonlight struggling to descend through multiple layers of forest canopy to reach the floor below.”

We like the word “like” an awful lot, like it’s the magic key into descriptive writing. You can rely on it too much, however, like a Wall Street banker using cocaine. It becomes addictive.

Today’s writing challenge: Take a really descriptive scene that you’ve already written and rewrite it so the word “like” doesn’t appear.

Any takers?

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About Kurt Schweitzer

A former vampire logistics facilitator, past purveyor of Italian-style transportation, and Y2K disaster preventer, I'm currently creating websites, novels and other fictions while reinventing myself. Again.
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